Part I: First Impressions (15 Minutes)

On separate devices (laptops/tablets) read each other’s articles once.  This first read is important as it simulates how out audience is going to interact with this article. Once you have read the article, consider the following questions:
1. Can you explain in a sentence or two what this article is about? Write these sentences down. If you are struggling to summarize the article easily, this is important information for your writer. Write down as clearly as you can what you find difficult to understand about the purpose of the article.
This article is about Quentin Tarantino and his inspiration of films through his past. Using examples from 4 of his most famous movies it shows the inspiration and character that is Tarantino as a director.
2. Is the author successfully targeting our audience (first year students at JMU)?  The purpose of the article may be clear, but is the author making rhetorical choices that will convince our audience to keep reading? If the purpose of the article isn’t clear, is part of the reason because the author doesn’t have our target audience fully in view? Explain your answers as clearly as possible with reference to the article where possible.
I feel that the intro could be more appealing. Possibly using a sticky story like talking about how there was this guy that was a dropout video clerk and then he happened to use movies that inspired him to become an extremely famous director. With this draft there were only the two videos. I believe to make this more appealing to the specific audience, the use of media needs to be heavily used. Many more pictures and video clips rather than just describing the movie plots.
Part II: Reading with Media (20 minutes)
Read the article again, this time looking for flow between the various media elements. At this stage, your partner should have drafts of the media they are using.  For photographs and other kinds of images:
  • do they complement the writing?

The videos do compliment the areas that they are around, but there is not enough media for it to be effective.

  • Has the author effectively used the caption function in WordPress to explain the image or present additional writing on the subject?

There are no images yet, but I’m sure Leah will use it when there is more media!

  • Has the author been thoughtful about image size and the placement of the image within the post?

No images to say…

If the author has used embedded media such as videos, maps, timelines, prezis etc, the consider the following questions:
  • Has the author properly introduced the media so the reader knows what to expect from it, or understand how to use it?
  • Does the author refer to the media afterwards? Does s/he analyze the media, summarize it, or draw the reader’s attention to particular aspects of it? If so, is the author’s approach effective? Explain how their analysis and/or summary of the media might be improved.
  • Does the media enhance your experience of the author’s topic? If so, how? If not, how does the media distract you? In either case, highlight what you liked about the media and how might be improved.
  • If the reader interacts with the media by clicking “play”, then consider the following:
    • Is the media an appropriate length? (Did it go by too quickly or slowly?) — The videos get straight to the point and connect to what the author is saying.
    • If there is sound, is it of good quality? — Yup, the vids are excellent.
Explain your answers to the above questions as clearly as you can.
Part III: The Devil’s in the Details (15 minutes)
  • Read your partner’s piece once more, this time looking for paragraphs and sentences that do not cohere. Does the author have a clear point for each paragraph?

“Tarantino had eclectic tastes for old Hong Kong martial arts flicks, Japanese samurai movies, blaxploitation films and spaghetti westerns. Reservoir Dogs was built upon these movies, through their violence, action, and blood.”  —  These two sentences do not connect because after watching Reservoir Dogs, I don’t believe that it was based on a japanese samurai movie or spaghetti western. These two need a sentence in between or a more clarifying second sentence.

“The film centers around six criminals and one jewelry heist gone wrong. With color-coded aliases to conceal their identities, all are strangers to each other’s past. They are sure the robbery will go off without a hitch, however when the heist begins the police arrive at a remarkable pace. The men are taken aback, and run to the rendezvous spot. The few who make it back argue it out, sure that there is a traitor among the group.  Pre and post robbery events play out the development of relationships between the men, and reveals the overall story. Ending on a violent note, one dying companion reveals that he is the undercover as his friend cradles him in his arms. The police rush in as the friend shots the cop, and the police open fire.” — Not sure if a whole plot summary is even necessary for this article. I thought the main purpose of this article was to compare Tarantino’s inspiration from movies into his own films. Maybe just cutting this paragraph out would get to the deeper message of the article.

Could you add the ‘Stuck in the Middle With You’ song???

I think putting titles such as City of Fire vs. Reservoir Dogs; Pulp Fiction, A Dime Novel on the Big Screen; Kill Bill’s Inspiration, and Django 2.0/Django Remakes. Putting titles I think would make it a much clearer article with a stronger flow.

“Amanda Plummer who plays the diner robber is Honey Bunny, has the name of a rabbit that died to Tarantino’s assistant.” — This confuses me haha..

“During the scene with Vincent Vega and Mia Wallace in Jack Robert Slims, the 50’s themed restaurant, Mia mentions the pilot she was in called Fox Force Five.” I don’t think the restaurant recognition in this sentence is needed to convey the message in the paragraph..

“Beatrix Kiddo, played by Thurman, wields a Hattori Hanzō sword. Hanzō in real life was a famous fifteenth century samurai and ninja master. The movie portrays him as the finest sword smith there ever was. Oren- Ishii the half Japanese/ half Chinese-American brat has a disturbing backstory depicted in anime. This style is typical and widely popular in Asian culture. Taking anime in full and incorporating it into a real life film is a clash of cultures.” Without knowing these characters at all, it becomes very difficult to comprehend the message without media.

Incorporate an image or two from the past Django. I had no idea there were movies before the one Tarantino came out with!

  • Are there sentences that are too long, or that do not make sense?
Part IV: Let’s have a chat (20 Minutes)
Finish up your post and publish. Ask your peer review partner to look at your notes. As you are reading together, be as constructive as possible: praise your partner for things they have done well, and give constructive advice on the things that need to be fixed. You have ten minutes to do this. Once you are done,  swap over, and let your partner guide you through his/her ideas on your article.